Friday 9 August 2019

Descriptive Writing


We are doing Descriptive Writing about what is going on here. Like what is going on now? Well I hop you like it.
  

Today I was just waking  down road all sudden chicks come RUING at me and it was like they are going to war or it was like they are playing  follow  the leader. But why are they not with there mum? Where is she well i guest its fun for now. Do they think I am there mum? 


4 comments:

  1. Kia ora, my name is Chriss I'm from Room 23 at Owairaka District School. The chicks are running behind because they need food because they are hungry and their MOM are not around because I can't see her and maybe she is gone hunting for food for them to eat.
    Blog you later.

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  2. cute dog with decks

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  3. Hi Tane, its Hunter here. I like at the end of the writing, you put"Do they think I'm there mum". You could go back and change hop to hope. Bye

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  4. Hi Tane Mackley here from Awahono school. I love the end of the writing. Maybe you can fix hop to hope. kind regards Mackley

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